Six Sentence Sunday

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After taking a break for several weeks, I’m ready to start writing again. If I’m diligent, I might be able to have my fifth book published just after Thanksgiving. It has a Christmas theme, and I would love to have it out for Christmas.

I’ve rewritten the first two paragraphs five or six times already, but this is what I have now. My books are first person POV, but I’m going to start my new book a bit differently. Here are the first six sentences of Windy City Hunter:

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Detective Bentley’s blood pressure was on the rise as he sat down hard on the cold steel bench in the police station. Chicago was the last place he wanted to be two weeks before Christmas. He had no clout here, and his demands for answers had only served to further aggravate the officers on duty. Six hours had passed, and he still didn’t know where Susan and Darby were being held. Worse, he didn’t know which one of them was being charged with murder.

He rubbed his temples in an effort to alleviate the throbbing.

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Pick any six sentences from your writing, whether a work-in-progress or a published work, and post them to your blog on Sunday.

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31 thoughts on “Six Sentence Sunday

  1. It sounds dorky, but I love emotional sitting. It’s a nice effect, and it’s something people do too, let their mood show in their actions. May I suggest “dropped” instead of “sat down hard”? It’s got a bit more of a thump on it.

    • Yes, of course. 🙂 I’ve already had him pacing instead of sitting. He was slumped on that bench, and I’ll try dropping him onto it, too. This “forward view” into the story is only two paragraphs. Once I have it the way I want, I think everything else will start to flow well.

    • Detective Bentley is used to “lake effect” snow and winds in NE Ohio, so he can deal with the weather. 🙂 I love any big city at Christmas. I’m like a kid when it comes to holiday decorations and lights. … Now February, that’s another story.

  2. sometimes it is good to have different POV I like the last line. The start and the endings are always the most difficult , and the middle too – I struggle over every letter.

    • Thank you, Vivien. I took a quick run over to your blog and stayed to read about plot holes, adorable shoes, and pasta cauliflower. 🙂 Your six was fun, and I loved the last line. Thanks for stopping by!

  3. I know what you mean about writing in first person. It comes far more easily to me like that, but I’ve been pressing for another style. I like what you wrote though and the descriptions 🙂

    It’s amazing you’ve written that many book. I’m still working on two novels off and on. Then there’s the story collection I have to tackle too. A lot on the back burner too….

    • I’ve tried a few short stories in third person, and I didn’t have to wrestle with them too much. If I write something other than Susan Hunter, I think I’d like to try 3rd. Kris, I was truly naive and just wrote books and published them myself. It wasn’t until I had three of them finished and published that I realized I might want to learn some of the finer points of writing. You are fortunate to have so many projects to work on!

    • Thank you, Dianne. I can’t believe I tweaked it a little again, and he is now pacing in the precinct, but I really like trying a change of POV to start this book. Thanks for reading my six!

  4. I see a mix of comments here, but I think that this has good tension and draws the reader’s interest. I’m curious to know how Darby and Susan got into this mess. Great six Maddie, and thank for stopping by my site.

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